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Alex peeked around the doorframe of the drawing room. The draperies were shut, and in the old rocking chair his grandmother seemed to have dozed off. Perfect! Ever so slowly, he crept across the old wooden floor to the cupboard beside the fireplace and -oh so carefully- opened the top drawer. He stood on tiptoe, fished around and barely surpressed a yelp of triumph when his fingers (one for each of his years, thumb not included) found the unmistakable shape of a key. A slow glance assured him grandma remained motionless, and off he was; across the room and toward the kitchen, where sweet temptation beckoned. After what seemed an eternity he made it to the kitchen cupboard, and held his breath as his hand solemnly rose to insert the key.

From the darkened room, grandma's cracking voice made him jump in surprise:

'All this soda will make your teeth shatter!'
©2009 ~wyldhoney
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Written for the prompts contest by =Inked-Page [link]

I chose the six word prompt, attempting to center the given words in the story (hence why it's so short :)). The words were: key, rose, jump, soda, teeth, shatter.

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:iconknifeeven:
Excellent descriptions and it really creates a tense atmosphere. Very well written.

(Sorry it took me so long to get round to reading and commenting on this). :D

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Dementia: Nature's way of making your retirement more interesting.
:iconwyldhoney:
Thanks you, and don't worry about that, I am often late in commenting as well (especially now, see the journal entry I just submitted).

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'Needed time to clear my mind and breathe the free air, find some peace there. Used to keep my heart in jail but the choice was love or fear of pain and I chose love...'
Anathema - 'Everything'
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I can see this developing into a really cool childrens story, with all the careful tension of Alex illustrated until the very last page where granny is eying him from the doorway :granny: hehe

I think the second sentence is a little confusing with the pronouns, and made me wonder if alex was a girl :B nice work!

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:megaphone:FEATURE ON THE LOOSE!:megaphone:

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:iconwyldhoney:
Thanks! Altered line two, you were probably right about it as I got momentarily confused myself. :)

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'Needed time to clear my mind and breathe the free air, find some peace there. Used to keep my heart in jail but the choice was love or fear of pain and I chose love...'
Anathema - 'Everything'
:iconinspiredimperfection:
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:megaphone:FEATURE ON THE LOOSE!:megaphone:

Intelligent writing is not just a Fantasy, discover the Two Paths arc by *Memnalar.

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