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Then, Suddenly... by ~wyldhoney:iconwyldhoney:

Categories Literature > Poetry > General Poetry > Haiku & Eastern


White feathers whirl down
Like snow falling in summer
- A dove hit the fan
©2009 ~wyldhoney
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A tragic piece - no, really, it is!

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Mood: Sadness ~Kabelzaag May 15, 2009, 11:32:41 AM
awwwwwww, poor little bird....
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~wyldhoney May 15, 2009, 12:07:16 PM
Like I said: tragic. :)

Thanks for the read and the fav!

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'Needed time to clear my mind and breathe the free air, find some peace there. Used to keep my heart in jail but the choice was love or fear of pain and I chose love...'
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~Zeldenhandel May 15, 2009, 2:22:38 PM
If the bird's name was 'shit' then you could call this "Shit hits the fan". :D ;)

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Zeldenhandel, putting the romantic in necromantic since a few days ago.
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~wyldhoney May 16, 2009, 10:42:28 AM
:)

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'Needed time to clear my mind and breathe the free air, find some peace there. Used to keep my heart in jail but the choice was love or fear of pain and I chose love...'
Anathema - 'Everything'
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=mode-de-vie May 21, 2009, 4:37:12 AM
Poor little bird. :( Very clever subject for a haiku, though! I applaud your work. :)

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~wyldhoney May 21, 2009, 12:24:30 PM
Thanks! Inspiration actually came straight outta life... we were driving on a small road when suddenly, from a driveway, a heap of feathers was blown all over the road. :)

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'Needed time to clear my mind and breathe the free air, find some peace there. Used to keep my heart in jail but the choice was love or fear of pain and I chose love...'
Anathema - 'Everything'
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=mode-de-vie May 21, 2009, 5:09:22 PM
Oh, that's abnormal! Great job putting it to use. ;)

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=inspiredimperfection Jun 9, 2009, 3:46:45 AM
tragic indeed! i love the image though.. and it makes me wish the past tense of hit was hat or something lol, just so the past-ness of the last line would sail slicker you know?

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~wyldhoney Jun 10, 2009, 6:24:28 AM
Yes, 'hit' should have a proper past tense... this way, it just keeps being associated with the presentness of the action it implies; and people generally don't like being hit, so it always has a sort of negative charge to it.

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'Needed time to clear my mind and breathe the free air, find some peace there. Used to keep my heart in jail but the choice was love or fear of pain and I chose love...'
Anathema - 'Everything'
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